Wednesday Write-in #34


Welcome to the Wednesday Write-in!

CAKE.shortandsweet runs a write-in every week to writers to practise their skills, and get chatting to each other about their work. Everyone is welcome to join in, and the more people you tell, the more everyone will get out of it.

Prompts

sinister :: minty fresh :: seoul :: add to cart :: gold

Guidelines

There are no hard and fast rules, but here are some brief guidelines:

  • You can use the prompts as inspiration or try to work them into your story somehow. Use as many as you want.
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63 thoughts on “Wednesday Write-in #34

  1. These Prompts look like last weeks. Twitter implies that this weeks are. :Prompts: sinister, minty fresh, seoul, add to cart, gold. Hope I’m not confused here.

      • Elaine, sorry, I don’t understand. If you mean that you follow blog updates by email then no, there’s no way for me to email it again once it’s posted, other than deleting and posting again which will just give everyone a headache :). However, the post above is now correct!

    • Don’t feel lazy – I thought this was very cute and clever, although I’d prefer ‘linger’ to ‘languish’.

      • I was tempted to put ‘bwahahahahahaaaa’ at the end but thought better of it.

        I think linger is the word I wanted to use but cognitive dissonance insisted on languish. I don’t like the word one but. It reminds me of smog and petrol fumes.

        Thanks for your comment 🙂

    • I really enjoyed the voice in this one! The crafty little bugger, eh? I’ve had plenty of mugs just like that. Some of them are now on toothbrush-holder duty in the downstairs loo or being used to store bottle-tops and random pieces of pocket detritus in a corner of the utility room. That’ll teach ’em. 🙂

      I didn’t quite understand the formatting you used, other than it served to slow down the narrative voice at the various points (I guess) when the mug is proving itself to be a great liar. I imagined the mug speaking with a ‘swagger’ at those points, which I hope is the effect you intended. For a moment, too, I was confused because I imagined the human character drinking the soup out of the mug, which next second was holding tea, but then I plugged my brain in and read the story properly and it all clicked into place. I am a bit slow this evening!

      Overall I thought this piece was clever, unique, interesting, funny and a pleasure to read. Great work. 🙂

    • This was quirky and fun. I know it’s all about the mug, but I also liked your descriptions of the leg, they made me wince! Well done.

  2. It’s Only Toothpaste
    I clean my teeth whilst gazing in the mirror. Floss and brush; pay attention to the gums. The advert promises minty fresh. What else is ‘fresh’, I ponder as I swill and spit? Bread straight from the oven or flowers cut at dawn; a brisk breeze on a wind-swept shore; a ruddy-faced youth becoming over-familiar; and of course lawyers all love fresh evidence.
    But I’m counting on minty fresh. When our lips meet and our tongues entwine I want you to drink me in, breathe me into your soul and love my flavour as I give you my freshly minted heart.

  3. Here’s hoping my columns behave at the bottom. Look forward to reading everyone’s.
    #wednesdaywritein

    The Interview

    A headache of bold coloured jackets fills the waiting area.
    The Competition.
    I join them and am greeted by a line of fake smiles framed by breezy bobs. Minty fresh gnashers set on sparkle: I give as good as I get.
    The Walls are a Who’s Who of Golden Sun-Risers past and present. It provides distraction.
    But I glimpse round the room again. Damn! A male candidate I hadn’t noticed. Always the main contender, but he’s not packing a huge punch. He’s in boffin props: contemporary tweeds and glasses.

    I take out my notes. Do some last minute preparation.
    Must get this one right.
    No more pouring coffees for screechy DJs, PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE!

    NOTES:-

    1.What makes you the best candidate for Golden Sunrise’s Whatever the Weather Slot?

    Gloss over: Reinforce:

    Degree Politics/ Geography. Bubbly, young, fun.

    Post grad in world affairs Keep abreast of latest celeb news.

    Studied in Seoul for year. Appeared in advert for beans as child.

    Don’t take self too seriously esp. where charity is
    concerned.
    Versatile: can sing, dance,
    Sporty: good for fun Pilates/ Zumba items
    ( Possible fitness video potential)

    Chatty: able to form puns swiftly( particularly about
    the weather ) to fill awkward silences.

    • No,columns didn’t behave.General idea is for her to gloss over academic stuff and reinforce fun, sunny disposition! Hope that helps you decipher what’s going on.

      • Real interview nerves. been there and you describe them well.
        Re the columns, WordPress is a sod to format. I avoid anything other than the ordinary. Do you know you can publish a piece as Private and check it out before going Public. See Dashboard/Add New and it’s at the top of the right hand column (as mine shows it).

    • A shame your columns didn’t work, but I get the meaning you’re aiming for regardless. I love stories that take unusual approaches to the prompts, like this one does. Your piece is fresh and interesting, and so ‘real’ that it puts me right back into all those hours I’ve sweated through interviews/review panels/funding meetings and so on. For that reason, it made me uncomfortable – but that meant it was effective! Really enjoyed this.

      • Thank you Patrick and SJ for wrestling with the ending regardless. Glad story related her nervousness.

    • The ‘headache of bold coloured jackets’ is a great image and it didn’t matter about the columns not working out. However, I would have liked something following the end of the CV.

    • I won’t give away the ending in this comment. I just wanted to metaphorically shake your hand and say ‘Well played, sir. Well played.’

      Brilliant stuff. Imaginative, fun (but scary), an excellent, fresh take on an oft-done subject, topical, gripping, really well written and perfectly paced. Truth be told, I loved it. Well done!

    • Imaginative and well executed as always. So you weren’t a fan of the lady! (PS Not sure what you mean by ‘hope it works for you’ on your comment – it’s not autobiographical!).
      PS2 – Lovely to meet L and M and thanks so much for the lift.

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    • A strange story. Not quite my genre, but well written and made me want to read up to the end.
      ( Know the secret of the apostrophe: it doesn’t belong in the possessive “its”.)

      • I entirely agree with the “its” – in fact I agree quite vehemently; I find myself hoping it was an “auto-correction” by the editor I was using – otherwise I shall have to whip myself soundly.

    • I liked that you made use of Spandau Ballet, too – my story featured it as well, but I didn’t use it as imaginatively as you did. An interesting piece which kept me reading, though I admit I was distracted by the incorrect use of ‘it’s’ the whole way through. Sorry! I’m a bit of a pedant.

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    • Really enjoyed this one! I think I’d have been plotting, Shelob-like, if I was married to a man like the one you describe in this story, too. Really great sense of claustrophobia and oppression, and her unhappiness – masked beneath her smiles – is really effective. Great writing. I’d just suggest two small things: watch your it’s/its, and it should be ‘she finally felt herself breathe out,’ – not breath. Sorry for my pedantry. 🙂

    • Unhappy couple. She sounds too dreamy and disconnected to form a plan. I think she’d just snap out of it one day and stab him with the nearest kitchen knife!

      • She’s got lots of hidden layers, I think – she is capable of being a ‘good girl’ while her heart is crying, so She could probably pull it off. She’d burst out laughing at the funeral, though…

      • Not really. I think he is toast.

        This, I think, is settled enough in terms of imagery, that I can see it developing into something more. Did I just write out the first chapter of something? Huh…

    • Yes, interesting, indeed! I was annoyed by her when she seemed to be smiling through, but I didn’t realise where she was headed. Great read.

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